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The main purpose of public libraries is to provide books, and they should not waste their limited resources and space on providing expensive hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs.

These days,
libraries
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 are considered the biggest source of information due to their vast collection of physical and digital stocks.
However
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, some people think that
libraries
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 should only continue to spend
money
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 on physical stock. I totally disagree with
this
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 notion. I believe that
libraries
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 will not only attract huge numbers of readers by spending
money
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 on IT infrastructures, but they will
also
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 store millions of
books
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 due to
electronic
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the electronic
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 nature of files. Students and scholars are always reluctant to visit
libraries
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which
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that
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 are just filled with
books
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, magazines, and broachers. The fundamental reason is that these resources are boring,
time consuming
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 and outdated. So, spending
money
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 to buy modern learning tools
such
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 as computer software and DVDs collections will not only solve these concerns, but they will
also
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 attract students to use these amazing collections in a peaceful study environment.
For example
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, Australian universities are spending
colossal
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amount
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amounts
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 of
money
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 to buy digital subscriptions and electronic
books
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 as students are taking interest in using computers rather than reading physical
books
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.
Hence
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, there is a need to spend resources in developing electronic
libraries
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 in order to attract
audience
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an audience
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. In conclusion, we have examined that how electronic sources of information
such
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 as videos and DVDs are helping people to come to
libraries
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, and how expensive IT infrastructure for building those learning institutes is in fact rewarding as readers will
able
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be able
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 to access thousands of
books
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 worldwide.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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