Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, a group of
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suggest that
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having a permanent job and salary, it is better to get
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a bad working situation. Others believe in order to progress in
life
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and have a better lifestyle, it is a good option to try to
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unsatisfactory situations. In
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essay, both will be explored. One of the main reasons why many do not want to
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their hard working conditions is to have a permanent income. Most
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people
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have families who should be supported financially and socially. Having a job with a guaranteed monthly income and
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benefits will help individuals to make a living with regular standards. If
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complain about their low income or unsatisfactory working environment, it is highly likely that they will lose their jobs, which leads to various financial problems in their lives.
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, working in these uncomfortable situations and having low incomes may be something that at least
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some
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to have a
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with
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concerns.
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, a group of
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believe in order to have a more comfortable
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and be happier, it is better to
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an unsatisfactory situation. Many individuals want to progress in their careers and benefit from their various financial opportunities. These
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cannot tolerate bad conditions, since they
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of it as a
hinderance
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hindrance
to
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an ideal
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.
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, they make
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to
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it in a way that guarantees their progress and high incomes. With more money, These
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can send their children to well-known schools and provide the best of everything for their family members. In conclusion,
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many
peolple
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people
are interested in tolerating a bad situation
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having the
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lowest
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standards of living, trying to
change
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and improve it can lead to a more comfortable
life
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and a better living condition.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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