Write about the following topic: Studying with a group of students in a classroom is more beneficial than learning online at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is a presumption that it is advantageous to study with peers in a class physically rather than in a virtual environment at home. I partially agree
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with, the major advantage of studying offline is it enhances social life.
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, being surrounded by people with diverse cultures and mindsets would make us ready to adapt with
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would make significant developments in the kids professional life as well.
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, it develops
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management skills as the kid has to stick to a specific
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routine. As the child needs to wake up at a specific
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as he needs to attend
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they maintain a schedule for class hours and break timings.
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, my cousin who is a 14-year-old used to be very disciplined with his studies but
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pandemic has messed his routine as he need not be physically present in
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, offline schools though
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not seem to make a magnificent
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it overall builds child’s diverse skills. On contrary,
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is the most happening thing these days. Due to the fact that
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it brings comfort as they need not wake up early in order to get ready and travel to
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, it would not waste the most valuable resource
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. Followed by
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provides
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to study various things rather than just
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subjects thereby developing broader knowledge.
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,
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lockdown which made everyone restricted to
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, allowed children to learn various things
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as coding, marketing and art opened opportunities for them to earn by freelancing. To sum up, it proved to be beneficial as well.
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