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People can live and work anywhere they want to choose, because of improved communication technology and transport. Do the advantages of this development outweigh disadvantages?

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Improved
communication
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 and transport have made it possible that people can choose the preferable cities to live and work in.
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 essay will argue that
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 trend has more benefits than drawbacks from two perspectives: efficiency and economy.  
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, sending messages via the internet and new
transports
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 have reduced a great amount of
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 on the road. In terms of
communication
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, in the past letters and telegrams were used to exchange information, which arrived after days.
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, online
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 software and mobile applications of today allow netizens to send various forms of instant messages—texts, pictures, voice messages and video calls—whenever and whatever they like to build close rapport.
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, with the invention of faster
transports
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, travellers commute using subways and take a long trip via bullet
trains
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instead
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 of buses and traditional
trains
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 that are much slower, thereby the saved
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 can be used for working or quality
time
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 with close ones.  
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, the improvement in the two fields of life has cut spending largely. On the one hand, while in the past text was charged according to how many were sent, a great number of current data companies provide their customers with unlimited mobile data at a relatively low price.
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, with wifi services offered in public, some even have long video calls for free.
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, new
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,
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 as bullet
trains
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 and maglev
trains
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, with lower ticket prices are affordable and preferable for most families. Indeed, it is reported by the Transportation Department of China that an increasing number of people choose bullet
trains
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 for cheap pricing as an alternative for flights, which suggests that the appearance of new
transports
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 enables travellers to go on cheaper long journeys. In conclusion, improved
communication
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 technology and transport have more benefits for reducing
time
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 on the road and spending less money.
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, I believe these advantages outweigh any disadvantages that will seem less important
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.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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