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Some people think that it is good to be ambitious. How important is it to be ambitious? Do you think it’s a good characteristic?

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Ambition-is
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Ambition is
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 the good ability to reach wide and successful results, and it is actually possible.
People
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this
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 ability actually have
the
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a
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 long patience, and going through the targets and dreams without looking at
surroundings
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their surroundings
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.
Definetely
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Definitely
,
people
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this
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these
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 traits gain
the
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apply
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success
more
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faster than other
people
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. Without
doubt
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a doubt
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,
ambition
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 is
wonderful
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a wonderful
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 trait for
people
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, with no
harm
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 effects. According to the ideas of many
people
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,
ambition
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 is considered to the sorrowful
traits
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trait
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,
also
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 they are mentioned about
the
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ambition
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 is leaving you in
stressful
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a stressful
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 and difficult
situation
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situations
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 because the situations often can be risky. It is
disapproval
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a disapproval
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 statement because it
is depend
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depends
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 on the person. If
people
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 can not assess
own
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their own
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 abilities by
yourself
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themselves
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 and create very ambitious and almost impossible goals
not
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in
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at
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 their level-it is their guilt. And after that in their memories conserved the negative statement.
Actually
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,Actually
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 if
person
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a person
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create
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creates
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ambitious
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an ambitious
the ambitious
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 goal, which
more
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is more
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 possible
in
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at
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 their level the
ambition
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 unlock
the
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many successful endings.
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, it is
considerable
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considered
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 that
the
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ambition
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 is one of the
key
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keys
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of
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to
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 success. Because major of simple
people
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 with
this
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 ability reaches to the successful livings. They are just producing and keeping
this
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 ambitious plan
with
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by
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 using the brain.
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, the football player Cristiano Ronaldo. In past, he with their mother was
live
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life
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 in very poor conditions. Their situation is absolutely poor and his mother lost the hope to live good. And after
that
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,that
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 he is got
a
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an
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 ambitious plan like
a
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apply
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wonderful living conditions. In present, he is
the
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apply
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one of the richest
person
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people
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 in
whole
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the whole
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 world. To sum up, I believe that
the
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apply
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being ambitious is not awful,
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, it is very helpful for you, because it can be your motivation
doing
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to do
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 something beneficially.
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