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Many people believe that modern technology has brought people together but other say it has driven us apart. Discuss the both views and give your opinion.

#people #technology
Over the recent decades, advanced technology has become an integral part
in
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people
’s life. There are some individuals
believe
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 that
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 modern gadgets
such
 as
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 mobile phone, laptop, a computer makes a person life easy and comfortable. While
other
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 argue that, these innovations create a gap between families and
friends
. In
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forthcoming ,paragraph I will explain both notions and
also
 give my point of view. To commence with, the predominant reason is that, due to improvement of devices and internet service
people
 can easily communicate with their long-distance relatives,
friends
 who live in a foreign land or far away from home. Unlike in the past , it so was difficult to connect with their dear and near one. But in the present time, with the help of new electrical devices and ,internet a person can be in touch with other
people
 in a minute.
Moreover
, they can
also
 find their long lost
friends
 and again connect with them. For
hence
, Oxford University publish a report, where they found,
people
 are more connected and happy because they can in touch with their close-one anytime.
As a result
, they, feel less
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longly
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 than before. On the other side, there are some
people
 who think that
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 it increases distance with a loved one. Perhaps, the reason is that
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 especially the young
people
 are very fond of using laptops, phone and most of the time they spend on the screen which makes them less social.
As a result
, they are unable to make
friends
 and connect with the outer world.
Secondly
,
in
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 present
point
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people
 are busy so that, they could not spend time with family. For that reason, they communicate with them through virtual services. So, the warmth of family and family bonding are going
fade
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 away. To conclude with, in my point of view, using new innovations not only brings society together but
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helps to make a beautiful society.
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