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Governments should spend money on public transportation rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #transportation #roads
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Nowadays governments fund a bunch of money to public
transportations
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, while some believe that public
transportations
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a
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great importance ,others claim that
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 one is roads,
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how ever
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 in my point of view ,the advantages of public transport more outweigh.
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, Public
transportations
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 have various type of advantages , to give an example ;relieve traffic ,environmental benefit and much more.
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metropolitan citizen traffic takes up a lot of space in our lives but
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 connected to use of
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 rate , almost everyone has a
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 ,
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 if the rate of using
car
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 decrease and public transportation using rate can increase
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 effects directly in
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 way for the traffic .
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 the most
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popular
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these days , environmental pollution . While that if peoples
use less
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car
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 each day it can be solved without any danger ,
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 connected to public
transportations
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 , for an example south countries
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 a cleaner air since the percentage of public transport usage is higher rather than the others .
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result
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 governments should spend much more money
to
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on
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 public
transportations
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 rather than roads
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worldwide for our social and physical health or
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get used to each other .
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