Computer games are becoming very popular among children of all ages and nationalities. Parents say they are concerned because these games have little educational value and many harmful effects. Do you agree or disagree?

In
this
, modern era the technology has made rapid progress in the
last
few years,
thus
it has given feasibility to operate any
games
even on the smallest device.
Although
, many people believe that it has a major effect on the
students
and ones who play the
games
online. I agree with the given statement as it will reduce to be creative and has some dangerous impact.
Firstly
, spending more
time
on online
games
it
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will impact their studies and imagination. In the recent report of the Hindustan times show that there is rapid progress in the school going student for spending more
time
in involving themself in computer
games
, as result
this
year the percentage of passing
students
has reduced dramatically. It shows that pupils, who are not spending more
time
studying the regular curriculum are falling behind than those
students
who are spending less
time
in
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playing
games
.
Further
, It will reduce to think more which eventually makes them
to
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be less
creativity
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in their
life
.
Secondly
, it has many sides
effect
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effects

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of playing
games
in
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on

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computers as well as on mobile phones, Most of them who spend playing
games
more will lose their
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eye sight
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which will cause them to wear
glass
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glasses

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. Which eventually will impact their
life
.
For example
, In China, most of the
students
wear
an
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eyeless even during the initial stage of their
life
,
further
, many
students
will fall ill when they try to study on the books. According to DR. Patel, there is an increase in cases of headaches special in lower-class
students
,
as a result
of them had low grades in their studies. Spending more
time
online
games
will cause them to pay a high price by visiting hospitals. In conclusion, some believe that computer
games
are essential, but it has major effects on student future and can lead to damage other parts of the body. Which will cause them to harm in the later stages in
life
.
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