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Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Food
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 is essential for the functioning of various functions in the body. It is believed by humankind that receiving
food
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 from various regions should be restricted and should give importance to
the
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 own regional
foods
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.
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 essay will argue with the statement and will deliver the views. First of all,
foods
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 from different countries may have a difference in quality, better taste, and, give way to a variety of choices.
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, it increases the economic rate and raises the demand for the product.
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,
foods
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 are imported from various countries like kiwi from
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New Zealand
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, nuts from Afghanistan and Iran,
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 from Saudi Arabia.
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 to
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,
they
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 are many other things that have been
exporting
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exported
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 and
importing
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imported
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 to a specific region to fulfil the needs of the community as the population is rising the demand for
food
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 is high.
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, it decreases the demand for crop growing in the country which leads to the loss of the farmers who have been struggling for better productivity. People may know a variety of cultures through different tastes of nutrition.
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, India is
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 for the commercial supply of rice and wheat than various nations in the world.
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, the pricing value should be fixed for both imported and
exporting
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 stocks in
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 a way that it does not affect the productivity rate, and, quality because the lower the value higher
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the sale. In conclusion,
foods
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 should be exported and imported to various nations because people may know each other through
food
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.
Government
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The government
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 should build an organisation to take
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 steps in the upcoming era.
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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • domestically produced food
  • agricultural sector
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • food security
  • global market fluctuations
  • trade disputes
  • local food production
  • dietary variety
  • international trade relations
  • retaliation
  • exports
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