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Some people think that countries should limit the amount of food that they import and mainly eat products from their own country. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Food
 is essential for the functioning of various functions in the body. It is believed by humankind that receiving
food
 from various regions should be restricted and should give importance to
the
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their
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 own regional
foods
.
This
 essay will argue with the statement and will deliver the views. First of all,
foods
 from different countries may have a difference in quality, better taste, and, give way to a variety of choices.
Moreover
, it increases the economic rate and raises the demand for the product.
For example
,
foods
 are imported from various countries like kiwi from
Newzealand
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New Zealand
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, nuts from Afghanistan and Iran,
Dates
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 from Saudi Arabia.
In addition
 to
this
,
they
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there
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 are many other things that have been
exporting
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exported
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 and
importing
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imported
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 to a specific region to fulfil the needs of the community as the population is rising the demand for
food
 is high.
on the other hand
, it decreases the demand for crop growing in the country which leads to the loss of the farmers who have been struggling for better productivity. People may know a variety of cultures through different tastes of nutrition.
For instance
, India is
popular
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more popular
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 for the commercial supply of rice and wheat than various nations in the world.
However
, the pricing value should be fixed for both imported and
exporting
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exported
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 stocks in
such
 a way that it does not affect the productivity rate, and, quality because the lower the value higher
will be
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apply
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the sale. In conclusion,
foods
 should be exported and imported to various nations because people may know each other through
food
.
Government
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The government
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 should build an organisation to take
such
 steps in the upcoming era.
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Your opinion

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