Technological improvement is making our life more comfortable. Some people argue that this is a positive trend, while others say it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

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goes that

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are getting more and more dependent on

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. Though

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considers it as a huge blessing for human life, there are both sides of logic whether the advancement of

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is doing good or bad for us in the long run. Followed by an opinion of the

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, a detailed discussion on both points of view is given below. Currently,

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across the world are at the best of enjoying the benefits of

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communication. Regardless

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distance in between, they can set up

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online audio-visual contact with their loved ones, can join live programs online, get

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updates of emergency events and take immediate measures. As

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can communicate efficiently without any physical movement, they can use more time in other productive jobs to make their life smoother and faster.

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, a study on 2000 British adults shows that they save around 7 hours each week using online

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technology

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like internet banking, voice messaging etc. which means

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population as a whole can save 24 billion hours a year because of using online communication

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is another revolutionary branch of technological advancement. It made

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's daily life easier and faster. Though there are some common arguments against

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making

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physically inactive, leading to a sedentary lifestyle, doubling the risk of obesity, diabetes, cardiovascular diseases, depression and so on. Despite admitting these drawbacks,

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argues that

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is giving us huge benefits.

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, studies show that over the

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three decades, 76 million

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will retire and only 46 million new workers will be available to replace them,

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will be the viable solution to fill

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demand-supply gap. In conclusion, widespread use of

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and advanced communication

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people

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are now globally more connected than ever before.

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technological revolution is not free from blame as it is accused of facilitating serious

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and some chronic diseases. Apart from a few negative aspects like cyber-bullying and

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sedentary lifestyle,

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overall believes that

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the technological

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revolution is a massive blessing for human civilization.

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Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Technological improvement is making our life more comfortable. Some people argue that this is a positive trend, while others say it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

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robots and artificial intelligence are being developed to replace humans in the workplace. why is this happening do you think this will have a positive or negative impact on society?

In some countries, more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this question?

Smoking should be banned in all public places even though it would restrict some of other people’s freedoms. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.