Many feel that happiness is mainly an individual responsibility, while others feel that there are important external factors. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Nowadays , most people argue , to be happy is mainly the duty of a
human-being
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where
other
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others
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believes that there are some other
cruicial
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crucial
points leading to
the
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happiness
. In my opinion ,
Although
its the
responsibilty
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responsibility
of an individual to be heady , some other factors are
also
playing a vital role in
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happiness
.
To begin
with , the
person
should be strong enough . As if anything bad happens in his
life
like if he does not get a good result of his long hard work ,
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the
person
duty to tackle
with
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that situation and does not let that situation
to
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be heavy on himself because he has the option to try again .
In addition
, the individual should have control
on
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his emotions . Even though there are many emotional moments in his
life
where it is not important to be sad , he does not have to pay attention to those silly things and try to be busy
in
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his own development .
On the other hand
, there are some other points which are important for
happiness
. Situations in
the
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life
.
For
example
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if a
person
tried a lot even after his failure and he is able to achieve that goal or job but when it is time to join ,
accident
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the accident
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is
occure
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occur
and he
lose
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somebody parts now what he will do ? How he can be happy ? So the situation must be good to be happy .
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The family
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should be supportive . As
family
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the family
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is playing a
cruicial
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crucial
role in
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everyone's
everyones
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everyone's
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life
, they have to support their child in his doing because if guardian stop their offspring to doing what he
want
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wants
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to do or he is doing
then
it really affects his
happiness
. In conclusion ,
however
, the
person
should be strong enough , situations in the
life
and support by the family is playing a vital role in his
life
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Individual responsibility
  • External factors
  • Personal choices
  • Mindset
  • Attitude
  • Mental health
  • Self-improvement
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Financial stability
  • Social relationships
  • Supportive family
  • Environment
  • Living conditions
  • Neighborhood safety
  • Cultural factors
  • Interplay
  • Dispositions
  • Case studies
  • Practical strategies
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