Some people believe that radio is the best source to get news while other think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views.

In
this
digital era, individuals are more curious to know what is happening around the world.A section of society asserts that
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wireless
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the wireless
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device is the good source to get in touch with surroundings whereas, a few people
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that scree can provide wider detail of information.
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essay will analyses both
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ideologies in the subsequent paragraphs with my opinion.
To begin
with, wireless has
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reach and frequency of people. Individuals who engross in any kind of activity can listen to the telegraphy either they are commuting to any place or working in
office
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. A survey conducted by the National Broadcasting Bureau revealed that fifty
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of consumption of telegraphy is outside the home especially in cars. Apart from
this
, radio is
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device. Its production is not only less expensive but
also
capture the market fastly which resulting in
On the other hand
, there are numerous reasons to watch
news
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on Screen.
Firstly
light emitting
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diodes
shows
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the video along with the audio. Due to it, viewers can easily memorize for
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time . If I had seen the live telecast on television, I could have understood the
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concept behind it.
Moreover
, it is easy to absorb the information when the host is talking. To conclude, there could be few
challanges
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challenges
of but overall it is favourable development in terms of convenience and
long lasting
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impression on minds.
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