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In order to study at university students are required to pay expensive tuition fees. Not all student can afford them so some people think that university education should be free for everyone. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#study #university #students #tuition #fees #student #people #education
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It is argued that, rising the
price
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 of gases is the only path to reducing traffic and
air
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 pollution problems in big cities. I strongly disagree with
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drawbacks
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the drawbacks
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 of increasing
petrol
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's
price
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 and present several possible solutions for
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 huge issue. There are many serious disadvantages of growing up the
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 of gas,
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 of all, in several businesses, gasses play a vital role. In more detail, raising the
price
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 of
petrol
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 leads
many
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 problems for drivers because they have to
increse
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increase
 the
ecpense
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expense
 of their service but
custumers
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customers
 are annoyed.
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, many
employes
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employees
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 have
fired
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 from their works because companies can't pay their salaries.
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, in 2019, enormous protestors in Iran went to
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 streets in their hometown and said their negative opinions about raising
petrol
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's
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price
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prices
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.
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,
government
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the government
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 can do many activities in order to reduce traffic and level of
air
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 pollution in urban areas. From my perspective,
government
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the government
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 can encourage
population
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the population
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 to obtain public transportation by
offer
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 some discounts
in
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on
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 the
price
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 of train and bus tickets.
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, planting trees can be highly beneficial for
crowd
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the crowd
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 to
breath
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 clean and fresh
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. In
orther
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other
order
 to mitigate the rate of
canbon
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carbon
-dioxide,
government
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the government
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 can invest in environmentally friendly cars and motors.
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, for many years,
Netherland
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the Netherland
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 council has encouraged people to ride
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a bicycle
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bicycle
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instead
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 their own
car
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cars
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. It was
great
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 example for all countries which face
air
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 pollution. To conclude,
air
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 problem is the main issue for many industrial cities but raising the
price
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 of
petrol
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does't
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doesn't
 work at all because it leads
many
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to many
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 problems for some jobs, but there are other paths to decrease
level
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the level
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 of greenhouse gasses in big cities
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 as, increasing greenery, providing electronic cars which are environmentally friendly and develop public transportation in suburb areas which humans can use.
Acoording
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According
 to what I said, I seriously disagree with
given
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 idea.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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