More and more children are becoming obese. What are the causes of this and What are the effects.
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Children
health problems in the recent era are constantly on the rise, overweight is one of them. Change noun form
Children's
This
situation has several reasons; it has some long-term effects. All these will explore in the Linking Words
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To begin
with, do not follow a productive lifestyle and eating unhealthy Linking Words
food
are the main reasons for Obesity. Use synonyms
Children
actively consume Use synonyms
first
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their first
food
, which is unhygienic. Use synonyms
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, many students Linking Words
consuming
junk foods during school time and they are Wrong verb form
consume
attracting
to these foods, for which there are no rules. Wrong verb form
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Additionally
, these days, Linking Words
children
are maintaining an unhealthy lifestyle by watching television and using gadgets. Most Use synonyms
children
are not getting enough physical activity and the results are detrimental, Use synonyms
also
parents do not give Linking Words
proper
time.
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On the other hand
, these causes have Linking Words
long term
consequences. Add a hyphen
long-term
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food
is effective for instant eating and those who have no time to make Use synonyms
food
, it is unhygienic and damages our immune system. Use synonyms
For instance
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children
's obesity and different types of health problems boom. Use synonyms
Consequently
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Due to
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lifestyle
they do not maintain relationships with family and friends; Add a comma
lifestyle,
however
, they face a bad amalgam of illness stress and drug abuse.
In conclusion, it must be highlighted that obesity in Linking Words
children
is responsible for eating unhealthy Use synonyms
food
and feeling to lead a productive life. If do not find out the problem of solving the effects of these factors will be even greater. Use synonyms
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but not least there is no denying that Linking Words
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The essay lacks a clear structure and logical flow of ideas. Additionally, the introduction and conclusion need improvement for coherence and cohesion.
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The essay partially addresses the task by discussing causes and effects of childhood obesity. However, it lacks depth and specific examples to fully support the main ideas.
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