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It is said that travel broadens the mind. What can we learn by travelling to other countries? Should we first explore our own countries? What do you think?

#travel #mind #countries #first
In modern days,
countries
 are now not bounded by borders, thanks to advanced technology and transportation. We now can easily learn more about other nations'
culture
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cultures
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 by travelling abroad,
for example
.
However
, some
people
 believe that exploring our own
countries
 is
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 priority. In my opinion, learning about native
countries
 is not a necessary thing
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nowadays.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons why we don't have to discover our
countries
 anymore as well as the reasons and benefits of going to another nation. Technology has progressively advanced in the past 50 years, and it has greatly contributed to our search
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further
 knowledge. As of now, everything about our
countries
 is omnipresent.
For instance
, with a single click of remote control, we can learn about today's news. Another touch of
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the smartphone
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smartphone
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 will lead us to a great deal of information about our history, economy, culture, etc. Even without
the
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access to those devices, a daily newspaper still contains sufficient details for us to acquire.
However
, even with the technology boom, knowledge about other
countries
 is somewhat limited to foreigners because some of it is trivial or not mentioned in social media, and sometimes it is misleading. In order to find out more about one country, many
people
 have
chosed
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chosen
 to travel abroad. By travelling, we can directly learn about one's culture which was only seen on the Internet and TV. Communicating with the natives gives us an insight into the
people
 and their pasts, which are not accurately depicted as we see on
the
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social media, and a chance to brush up
foreign
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 language skills. Travelling is said to help us broaden
the
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 minds, but some
people
 think it is
useless
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a useless
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 thing to do unless we have discovered all about our nations. In my opinion, we can learn a lot of
invalueable
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invaluable
valuable
 information by travelling.
Also
, it is a lifetime experience.
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