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Tourism has increased so much over the last 50 years that it is having a mainly negative impact on local inhabitants and the environment. However, others claim that it is good for the economy. Discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of tourism and give your own opinion.

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In the
last
 few decades,
tourism
 play a vital role in
world
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 economy and general
people
 life. It is often argued that
,
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tourism
 has some drawbacks which destroying local culture and climate. While
other
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 believe that, it helps to create new job markets and reducing poverty ety. In
this
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I will try to explain both arguments and give my point of view.
To begin
 with, for the improvement of the transportation system
people
 can frequently visit any place around the world. For that reason, it is common to see changes in culture but when
tow
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 cultures mixed with each other it creates problems. Because adapt new one and forget their own root.
Furthermore
, most of the historical
places
 or tourist
places
 are not so clean because
travelers
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 through garages
any where
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.
In
addition
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 many
people
means
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 many vehicles which destroyed the freshness on those
places
.
On the other hand
,
tourism
 is
most
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 growing industry nowadays. It
is helps
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 reduce poverty. It creates
new
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a new
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job
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jobs
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 which helps
people
 to earn more
many
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money
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 and
also
 live a decent life.
For example
, in Vietnam,
income
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the income
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of
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per person increase because of
boosts
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the boosts
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 of
tourism
.
Secondly
, it
is
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also
 gives a nation to show their cultural work like
,
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hand crafts
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handcrafts
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, pottery. Because, when foreign visitors brought those things and bring that with them more
people
 became show interest on a country
hand work
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. To conclude
with
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, in my
opinion
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tourism
 has
lot
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 of benefits
compare
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 to its disadvantages.we just need to increase facilities and promoting historical
places
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • local inhabitants
  • economy
  • boosts
  • cultural exchange
  • preservation
  • restoration
  • environmental degradation
  • overcrowding
  • strain
  • infrastructure
  • cultural dilution
  • commercialized
  • economic dependence
  • sustainable tourism
  • mitigate
  • adverse effects
  • regulation
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