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The promoters of social media claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before. While critics claim that social media site often impinges upon one’s privacy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Social
media
,indeed,has played a
prominant
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prominent
 role in establishing communication among
people
.While
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some populace contend that it has intruded
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 privacy of users.In my opinion, it is obvious that the communication channel that it has created has outweighed other disadvantages and has enabled
people
 to share things with one another. To commence with, the evolution of the apps like
facebook
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,
instagram
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 and
twitter
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 has enabled
people
 to share views freely and easily with just one click. In fact, these websites are more handy compared to
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of
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emails.These mobile apps have not only facilitated
communicating
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 it has
also
 enabled hassle-free commercialisation.
For instance
, the small designer shops have
instagram
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 profiles where they post new arrivals and
thus
 attracting
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customers.Twitter's Metoo tag has become very famous among women which in turn is a positive
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 from social
media
.
On the contrary
,Albeit, concede that
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social
media
 has contributed
for
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 connecting
people
,it has brought few drawbacks as well.
For example
, in apps like
twitter
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, commenting on celebrities personal life decisions is a way of interfering the personal privacy which is obnoxious.
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, activities like posting pictures without
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 of the owner
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 intrusive. Since, it provides freedom to express, it
also
 provides freedom to criticize as well. To conclude, social
media
 has both pros and cons but despite, having downsides there are
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 of advantages.
Hence
, it has definitely contributed to
conecting
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connecting
people
 across the world.
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