The promoters of social media claim that they are connecting people and enabling people to share like never before. While critics claim that social media site often impinges upon one’s privacy. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Social
media
,indeed,has played a
prominant
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role in establishing communication among
people
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some populace contend that it has intruded
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privacy of users.In my opinion, it is obvious that the communication channel that it has created has outweighed other disadvantages and has enabled
people
to share things with one another. To commence with, the evolution of the apps like
facebook
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,
instagram
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and
twitter
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has enabled
people
to share views freely and easily with just one click. In fact, these websites are more handy compared to
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of
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emails.These mobile apps have not only facilitated
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it has
also
enabled hassle-free commercialisation.
For instance
, the small designer shops have
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profiles where they post new arrivals and
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customers.Twitter's Metoo tag has become very famous among women which in turn is a positive
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from social
media
.
On the contrary
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social
media
has contributed
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connecting
people
,it has brought few drawbacks as well.
For example
, in apps like
twitter
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, commenting on celebrities personal life decisions is a way of interfering the personal privacy which is obnoxious.
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, activities like posting pictures without
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of the owner
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intrusive. Since, it provides freedom to express, it
also
provides freedom to criticize as well. To conclude, social
media
has both pros and cons but despite, having downsides there are
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of advantages.
Hence
, it has definitely contributed to
conecting
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connecting
people
across the world.
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