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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Some people suggest that the circumstances of a crime, and the reasons for committing it should be taken into consideration when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sentencing for those found guilty of
crimes
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 presents a difficult challenge because justice must be seen to
done
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 for both victims and perpetrators. Mandatory sentencing ensures that the same sentence is handed out for the same
crime
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;
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, judges lose the ability to adjust
sentences
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 and cannot take into account factors
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 as age and the possibility of rehabilitation. In
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 essay, the consequences of mandatory sentencing will be discussed. Mandatory sentencing has the advantage that everyone is aware of exactly the sentence they can expect if found guilty of a particular
crime
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.
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, since people who commit
crimes
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 are often poorly educated and may not consider the consequences of their actions when they commit a
crime
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,
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 approach may offer little benefit. Removing the ability of judges to adjust
sentences
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 on the basis of the circumstances of a
crime
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 may
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 lead to injustice as it assumes that any two people who commit the same
crime
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 have the same level of moral culpability.
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, someone who murders in order to prevent suffering is morally different to someone who murders a stranger at random. Applying the same
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 in
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 disparate cases clearly would not serve the interests of either justice or the wider community.
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, it may be appropriate to give a young person who has committed a
crime
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 a lighter sentence in order to give them the opportunity to change their behaviour and become
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productive and law-abiding
citizen
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.
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, a person who is older and has committed many
crimes
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 should receive a heavier penalty as they are more likely to
reoffend
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re-offend
 in future and heavier
sentences
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 are needed to protect the community. In summary, mandatory sentencing may lead to injustice because the same
crime
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 may be committed for very different reasons.
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, a person’s history and the opportunity for rehabilitation should
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 be taken into consideration when deciding
sentences
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 for those convicted of committing
crimes
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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