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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Experience
 and
knowledge
 are both crucial in the modern work environment.
However
, I personally feel that the focus on the former is much more beneficial in the modern
knowledge
-based economy. The importance of
knowledge
 for
workers
 cannot be underestimated.
For example
, employees need qualifications and
knowledge
 of
skills
such
 as numeracy and literacy, as well as
knowledge
 of how systems,
such
 as computer systems, work. In order for professionals
such
 as engineers, teachers or doctors to be successful,
for example
 in their careers, they need
knowledge
 as well as
experience
. While certain types of
knowledge
 can be acquired during work
experience
, it is essential for a body of
knowledge
such
 as medical and engineering information to be acquired beforehand. In today's world,
however
, where
knowledge
 is effectively controlled by machines, it is essential for
workers
 to focus on developing the
skills
 to manipulate
this
knowledge
, as it is so voluminous that it is now impossible to acquire.
Knowledge
, in effect, plays a secondary role
to
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skills
 and
experience
. There are,
therefore
, clear advantages to attaching greater value to
experience
 compared to
knowledge
 in the workplace. The modern world demands that companies and institutions have employees with very sophisticated
skills
 not just in technology, but in dealing with modern systems.
As a result
, frequently
workers
' technical expertise often takes precedence over basic
knowledge
 and without
workers
 with the necessary
experience
, it is impossible for companies and organisations to flourish. As we have seen, despite
knowledge
being
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 very important in the modern workplace, it is clear that the advantages of a greater emphasis on
experience
outweighs
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 any disadvantages.
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