The average standard of people health is likely to lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Recently, there has been a lot of discussion about
health
and whether it is going to improve or not. In my opinion, I think the
people
will become
unhealtheir
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unhealthier
healthier

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in
future
than they are now. There are many reasons that support the idea of becoming unhealthy in
future
.
Firstly
, one reason is that of
food
.
People
tend to eat more fast
food
nowadays. They tend to eat sweets and chocolates whenever they want.
This
appears to be because
people
are busier now than they used to be. So,
people
don't have a chance to cook or learn the art of cookery.
Also
, having a lot of unhealthy
food
can lead to obesity and it could be a serious
health
issue in the
future
. Another reason is that
technology
is developing
everyday
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. Young
people
enjoy buying new gadgets and the latest devices.
This
has a negative impact on their
health
, especially when they enjoy video games. Spending long hours looking at a screen leads to bad eyesight and obesity as well. Yet another reason is that
lazziness
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laziness

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is a big issue. Different forms of
exercises
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might disappear in the
future
because
people
don't like sports.
Also
,
people
prefer spending most of their time on the internet and the internet is growing every single day. Other
people
might disagree and say that
health
will improve in the
future
. They believe that new sports and new ways to exercise will appear in the
future
.
However
, I don't think it can happen since the majority of
people
spend less time outdoors.
Moreover
, other
people
believe that
technology
will try and help
people
improve their
health
.
For example
, there have been some games released on the Wii console that makes
people
exercise but
technology
is developing more in a negative way.
For instance
, more phone industries are developing new applications
everyday
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and today’s generation likes to
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follow

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every trend.
This
prevents
people
to go outside to exercise. They
likes
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to spend more time on the internet downloading new programmes or reading gossips about celebrities.
This
affects
people
's
health
badly. In conclusion, I believe that
people
's
health
is affected negatively by fast
food
,
technology
and sports and it will be a problem in the
future
.
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