In many professional sports, there is an increase in the number of athletes using banned substances to improve their performance. What are the causes of the phenomenon and what are some of the possible solutions?

In
this
modern age, if the athletes are able to win a
comptetition
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competition
, they could gain almost everything they can imagine, money, reputation, or even to be a new celebrity.
Although
nowadays people
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have
sportmanship
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sportsmanship
and fair play, there are some group of
professional
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who try to do every way to seal the prize.
This
essay will discuss
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the causes and possible solutions to solve
this
problem.
To begin
with, I believe that every
sport
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players want to be a champion, so they have to improve their body fitness with
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of
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types of food.
Therefore
, they might eat something that
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with banned stuff
with
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unintentional.
For instance
,
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lastest
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international sports event, Olympics 2020, Thailand is banned by the referee of the Olympics
in
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lifting weights because they found some prohibited substances
although
they did not
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to do it.
This
has bolstered that increasing of the
sport
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players who are banned by receiving
an inappropriate substances
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into their body because they might obtain something that
contaminate
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with. To prevent
this
problem,
sport
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teams should hire
sport
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scientists as a staff in the team in order to notice and indicate the nutrients that athletes should receive in one day.
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, they are able to choose the right nutrients
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the body without any problem. To conclude, to increase performance in the tournaments, the athletes have to prepare themself both physical and mental, especially in physical because they should have a staff who have a duty to manage the nutrition,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Performance-enhancing drugs (PEDs)
  • Doping
  • Anti-doping regulations
  • Detection methods
  • Ban substances
  • Ethical issues
  • Health risks
  • Fair play
  • Sportsmanship
  • Stakes
  • Pressure to succeed
  • Enforcement
  • Awareness programs
  • Testing frequency
  • Entourage
  • Science advancement
  • Financial gains
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