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Education should be free for everyone. Do you agree or disagree with this statement, and to what extent?

#education
Education
 play
vital
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 role in society. Some people hold the
believe
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 that
,
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Education
 must be free of cost for every person in the world.
Although
, it helps to improve
knowledge
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the knowledge
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 of people, yet, competition is increasing required extra fees.
To begin
 with, there are several reasons which support my point of
agreement
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the agreement
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are
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that are
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 legitimate.
Firstly
, if
every one
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everyone
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 is able to get
education
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an education
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 free,
then
 it will improve the
litrecy
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literacy
 rate of the country.
As a result
, improve
litrecy
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literacy
 rate declines the violence rate.
Secondly
, illiteracy is the main cause of unemployment, due to many
well paid
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 jobs required a degree.
For instance
, the Theme study has been shown that in the UK
education
 till secondary school is without any fee and nearly 90
percent
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per cent
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citizens
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of citizens
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 are educated. On the opposite side, competition is growing day by day. Some courses are much expensive and need more hard work, if
government
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the government
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 provides
education
 free of cost,
then
 it will decrease the importance of
study
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the study
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,
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apply
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 because students will not take it seriously. To justify it, to get a job
of
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as
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doctor
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a doctor
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 person need to work strictly on it and spend a lot of money on it.
Moreover
, it soars the expenditure of government, because there are many other issues that they need to be tackled
such
 as crime, health facilities.
This
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are
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also
 mandatory to give safe and secure life to society. To conclude, while the free
of
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charges
education
 is essential to make the world
better
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a better
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 place to live;
however
, it declines the importance of study
at
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to
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 some extent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifelong education
  • continual learning
  • adapt
  • changing technologies
  • societal norms
  • cognitive function
  • cognitive decline
  • personal development
  • self-improvement
  • formal education
  • navigate
  • emphasis
  • pressure
  • contentment
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