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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for poverty? What can be done to help the poor?

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All countries around the world have an indigent population and
also
 there are various solutions to tackle
this
 issue. In
this
 essay, I will explain the most important cause and the solution to
this
 problem, and the following examples will be provided to support my point of view. There is a significant reason causing poor
people
 in every
country
 around the world is that economical status which refers to the well-being of the population in the nation. It is clearly seen that if which
country
 has a high income, there are likely to have poor
people
 less than fourish society.
This
 would indicate by economic indicators
such
 as unemployed rate, Gross Domestic Product or called "GDP".
For example
, according to the latest survey conducted by Bangkok University, it has been reporting that as Thailand is a middle-income
country
, there is the employment-population ratio by 2021, at 58.5 per cent was a little change from the year before,
this
also
 relates to the income of
country
 which was a bit increasing too. The potential solution to solve
this
 issue would be the responsibility of the government, where need to take action in the education field in order to decrease economic disparity status in the community. Education would lead to have a good career and get a higher salary,
therefore
 if the government support the population to have the knowledge and leading to a professional career,
this
 would reduce the number of poor
people
 in the
country
. In conclusion, indigent
people
 have in every
country
 around the world but the number would be different which come along with the economic status, so government should tackle
this
 problem as soon as possible.
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