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The below shows information about changes in average house prices in five different cities between 1990 and 2002 compared with the average house prices in 1989.

The chart illustrates the average house
prices
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 in five different
cities
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 between 1990 and 2002, in comparison with the average house
prices
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 in 1989. Overall, the
prices
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 decreased in New
York
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, Tokyo, and
London
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during
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from
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 1990 to 1995 while the
prices
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 increased in New
York
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,
Madrid
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, and
London
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during
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from
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 1996 to 2002.
London
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 experienced the greatest increase in
prices
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 over the 12-year
period
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. According to the chart, the
prices
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 of
houses
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 in
Madrid
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 and
Frankfurt
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 increase by 2-3%
during
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 1990 to 1995.
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, the
prices
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 decreased in New
York
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, Tokyo, and
London
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 by 5-8% in the same
period
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 compared to the
prices
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 of those
houses
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 in 1989. Interestingly during the
period
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 1996 to
2002
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,2002
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 the
prices
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 of
houses
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 increased in all
cities
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 except
Frankfurt
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 increased.
Prices
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 of
houses
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 increased by 5% in New
York
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, 4% in
Madrid
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, and over 11% in
London
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 compared to their
prices
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 in 1989. The only city where
prices
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 decreased was
Frankfurt
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. Interestingly during the
period
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 1996 to
2002
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,2002
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 the
prices
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 of
houses
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 increased in all
cities
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 except
Frankfurt
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 increased.
Prices
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 of
houses
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 increased by 5% in New
York
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, 4% in
Madrid
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, and over 11% in
London
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 compared to their
prices
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 in 1989. The only city where
prices
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 decreased was
Frankfurt
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. Interestingly during the
period
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 1996 to
2002
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,2002
show examples
 the
prices
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 of
houses
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 increased in all
cities
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 except
Frankfurt
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 increased.
Prices
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 of
houses
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 increased by 5% in New
York
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, 4% in
Madrid
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, and over 11% in
London
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 compared to their
prices
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 in 1989. The only city where
prices
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 decreased was
Frankfurt
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • suburb
  • metropolitan
  • trend
  • appreciation
  • depreciation
  • residential market
  • housing bubble
  • real estate
  • economic factors
  • urbanization
  • infrastructure development
  • property value
  • inflation-adjusted
  • comparative analysis
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