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Internet crime is increasing rapidly as more and more people are using the Internet to make financial transactions. What can be done to tackle this problem?

#internet #crime #people #transactions
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Intenet is not
a
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 safest place nowadays, unfortunately. There are a bunch of different
kind
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 of possible
crimes
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 which
mae
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may
 be done through
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Internet
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the Internet
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 or via devices
which
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that
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 have
connection
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a connection
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 to
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Internet
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the Internet
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, even if they are offline and turned off. Using credit/debit cards,
such
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 payment
system
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systems
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 as Google Pay, Amazon Pay or PayPal is a usual practice for most
people
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 around the world as it's a very comfortable way to make purchases online. Most of any
brends
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brands
 and shops have their online versions to make any purchases
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 na few clicks without
leaveing
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leaving
 home and wasting time. That's all very
comforatble
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comfortable
 for most
people
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 but there is another side
in
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 making transactions online. There are a lot of
ways
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get
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to get
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 your
money
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for
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from
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 scammers or phishers.
Evenidentity
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Even identity
 theft is world spread now. Fortunately, there are several
ways
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 which can help you to protect your
money
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 and data in safe as well as banks and governments are always implementing new security services in order to prevent any kind of
Internet
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crimes
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. In my
opimion
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opinion
, spreading knowledge about possible
ways
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 of
Internet
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 crime around
people
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 will help to secure their data and
money
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 while using online payment systems.
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Also
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 there is a function called "chargeback" which banks are providing to their customer's if they make a request. It can be
requisted
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requested
required
 in case someone stole
money
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form
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from
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 a card or bank account, online shop made duplicated
transctions
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transactions
 and you paid twice for
a
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one good, any charges without your permission.
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Also
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Internet
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 protection services may have
big
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a big
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 impact in helping with staying on
a
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the
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 safe side. One more important way to fight
with
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apply
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Internet
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crimes
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 is protection
domestic
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the domestic
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Internet
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 by
a
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law and government which helps
people
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 to understand they can be protected and covered back. Unfortunately, it is almost impossible to tackle
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Internet
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the Internet
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crimes
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 issue nowadays so being informed about
pssible
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possible
ways
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 of
crimes
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 decreases
probability
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the probability
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 of getting scammed or being fooled around and lose any costs or important
peronal
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personal
 data.
Internet
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 crime is increasing rapidly as more and more
people
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 are using the
Internet
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 to make financial transactions. What can be done to tackle
this
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 problem?
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