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In today’s world, it’s private companies rather than government pay for and conduct most scientific research. Do you think the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Scientific
research
 is the moving engine of today's world, step after step progress in technology, healthcare, mathematics and much more improve the lives of millions every day.
However
 scientific
research
 is slow-progressing, frustrating and extremely costly; in a field like biological
research
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 even the simple storage of biological samples as blood, faeces and urines could cost thousands of euros due to the need of maintaining low temperatures for the preservation of their intrinsic characteristics for long periods. Nowadays it is private companies rather than the government to pay for and conduct most scientific
research
,
this
 is due to the high cost of technology and of the highly qualified personnel good scientific
research
 requires. Privatization of scientific
research
 on one side allows scientists from developing and less fortunate countries to contribute to the plate and take part in
research
, but from another side could push to a
sectorialization
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sectionalization
serialization
 of scientific
research
. A private company could invest in the most
proficuos
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profits
 areas abandoning fields that would make less more profit and be as important for the public and improvement of the society. An example of a neglected area of scientific
research
 are tropical diseases, that interesting mostly the less fortunate parts of the world aren't interesting from, the point of view of a western private company. Scientific progress allowed us to have a COVID-19 in less than two years while we are still far from having an effective HIV vaccine. So, in my
opinion
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 the advantages of scientific
research
 privatization do not outweigh the disadvantages; scientific
research
 should be conducted by the government and not be solely profit-oriented.
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