Some people think that it is necessary to learn about others countries. Other feel same can be learnt through TV and Internet. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Undeniable learn new things related to other countries

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something interesting. Many people think it is important to visit some states in order to learn about them.

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, others think it can be found on

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Internet

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essay will discuss both views, and I believe that

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and the

Internet

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are able to be good choices for learning about other countries.

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with, it could be true that to learn about some

region

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regions

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citizen

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citizens

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must travel to the country to get more information about them because they are able to feel immediately the culture of the country when they were staying there.

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human

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humans

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who have visited some states

such

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as China, Spain, etc, and stayed there for several days will know about the daily activities of citizens,

such

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as the habits, culture, language, traditional food etc.

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, individuals who travel to other regions

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gain unforgettable experiences because they are able to make relationships with local people.

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, most people prefer to learn about other communities by watching

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or looking on the

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because has several advantages.

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it is more efficient to learn by watching

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and

Internet

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because It is able to decrease the cost of the journey.

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, entity must spend their money to pay for the tickets and living costs when they live there.

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the cost can be allocated to the most important things

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as education, life necessities, and saving for their future.

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, it is able to save energy for individual, because they no need to go out of their house and only sit on the sofa to learn about other public lives. In conclusion, learning about other land by travel is better, despite it is more beneficial to learn by watching

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and the

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because it is more efficient

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the economy and saving more energy.

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, most citizens choose the second statement which is able to allocate their money to another thing.

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The essay presents a balanced discussion of both views, which is essential for a well-rounded argument in IELTS writing tasks.

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Your introduction and conclusion are clear and relate directly to the essay topic, which helps the reader understand your main points better.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

336 words

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