A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some
people
claim that
animals
should enjoy the same treatments as humans and should not
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or used to carry out experiments, while I personally agree with others who believe that
people
can have
animals
satisfied some of our necessary requirements
such
as meals and research on medicines. It makes sense since the claim for
animals
to enjoy the same rights as
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, as we are both vivid creatures, living on the same earth, breathing the same air, greatly shows humanitarian spirit. The kindness of
such
people
and the pity to those
animals
which are weak in the ecosystem and
food
chain
saved countless
animals
’ lives, even brought some species back from the risk of extinction several times throughout history. We have
nature
reserves, zoos, pet clinics, all prove the idea that
animals
can coexist with
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being
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.
However
, considering
this
debate only from humanity is not objective, since the basis of
law
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of
nature
is not humanity at all, which is,
instead
, the strong survive, and the weak die. The top position of
food
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chain
naturally offers
human
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the power to determine other creatures’ life or death. It seems inhuman and disrespectful to treat
animals
for our own intents without considering what their tomorrow will be, but it is reasonable for keeping
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the
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top of
food
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since
this
ensures the continuation of the human being. Even though
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are
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strong and dominant on the earth, we are not indefectible, which means we need to find approaches to cope with new diseases like COVID-19 and uncertainty of
nature
,
such
as
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and global warming. The tests of new medicines and methods require
animals
and
then
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,
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if the previous tests come out to be safe.
This
is obviously more humane and responsible than letting
people
be tested in the
first
place.
In addition
, eating other
animals
is justified in itself for
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as
this
follows the law of
nature
and
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chain
.
Instead
, forbidding
people
to have
animals
as meals is unreasonable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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