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The consumption of the world’s resources is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are causes and solutions?

#consumption #world’s #resources #rate
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It is often argued that
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the rate of natural
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 going downward. Because of the population on earth increasing
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in
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 alarming rate due to meet their regular needs the
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 of
water
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 , gas, oil are increasing and to solve
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 problem public awareness campaign can play a vital role. Generally speaking, there are many reasons behind
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 problem. Perhaps the predominant reason is that, higher growth of population . The use of
water
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 in households are increasing for that reason
people
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 pumping up surface
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 to provide
water
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 supplies as well as many miles and factories run with
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.
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, so they find almost 80% of pumping
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 being used
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 household purposes.
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, most of the vehicles and factories run with gas and oil to boost up economic
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stability.
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, it is created a shortage of
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resources
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, to tackle
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 situation government need to launch
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 awareness campaign program in the media and in a school to educate
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 about the dangerous side of the frequent uses of natural
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. The date needed to teach
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then
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 how can
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 save
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 as well as should inform
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 about present situations
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 world running out of
freshwater
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 very soon and
also
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 have a negative impact on the globe.
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, in Japan
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 are saving 60%
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 and gas that only happen for awareness.
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, the government
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 to-need impose taxes on the use of
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. To conclude , it is the high time we need to find renewable sources and demotivates
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natural
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