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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#businesses #emphasise #products #development
It is a common trend that businesses nowadays advertise their
products
 which are totally different
than
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 others. There are definitely several reasons for
this
，and I consider that it is a positive
development
 for both technology and
economy
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the economy
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. There are two main reasons why companies tend to
emphasis
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 these new aspects of
this
 kind of product.
Firstly
，as we all know,
company
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a company
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 produce a variety of goods in order to abstract customers to purchase them, which can make
company
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the company
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 earn enough money to ensure
running
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the running
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 of
business
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the business
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instead
 of bankrupt.
Therefore
, they manage to invent much newer
function
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functions
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 of their objects to appeal to the desire of consumers' buying so that taking place larger market proportion to thrive.
Secondly
，the atmosphere of chasing
unique
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 and new is
also
 a key factor for
company
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a company
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 to do
this
 action. People have their own aesthetic and tend to buy new things rather than fixing them due to the rapid
society
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development
. The
company
 should cater
people's
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 demands, only in
this
 way can consumers buy their
products
, so they would like to publicize more about the
products
. I take a view that it would be an optimistic
development
. From a technology
perspective
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，companies would invest
much
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a lot of
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 money in researching and developing new skills. The famous
company
 Huawei,
for example
,
they
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put more attention on the production of new goods. Research and
development
 investment is the largest proportion of all. Constantly launch of new
products
 with new technological function give Huawei a stable higher market position than other companies and a deeper
development
 for the scientific skills. On the economic level, advertisements of these things drive people to buy them, which can definitely contribute to not only the
company
 to make a profit but
also
 the improvement of
economyics
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economics
economic
.
Companiesy
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Companies
 should pay more
consume
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 tax on their high sales. The government is able to invest in public
service
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services
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，
such
 as schools，hospitals and so many，which leads to a happier society. In conclusion，there is no doubt that the implementation of business have a positive effect on many aspects
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emphasise
  • advertising
  • products
  • innovation
  • competitive strategy
  • consumer dissatisfaction
  • value
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