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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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In today’s world, public
transport
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 services play a central role for people who are unable to drive. In the majority of countries, some experts claim that it is an absolute imperative to spend a plethora of budget on building
railway
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lines
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 between cities while
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 think that the fund should use for upgrading public
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.
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 essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favour of the latter. On the one hand, certain demographics of society believe that
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 allocating a certain amount of money for creating
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lines
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 in
order
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 to establish a fast connection between cities is completely necessary. It means, not only do
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lines
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 provide a convenient way but they
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 lead to reach to the destination as quickly as possible in comparison with other types of public
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, should these
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lines
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 build, people will become more productive
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 work because less time is spent travelling on congested roads.
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 kind of transportation can support busy individuals to travel easily.
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, some people think that government needs to take into consideration the funds for fixing the previous public
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. In
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 they could repair the public services at a low cost whilst they should pay a large amount of money in
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 to construct
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lines
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trains
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. Indeed, these expenses are staggering for developing countries like Iran that do not have
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 a fortune to provide fast
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. It is for these reasons that, maintaining the current public
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 is considered as a more important issue compared to
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trains
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. To conclude, speedy as
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 are, the expenses of creating these services are indispensable. In my point of view, these funds should be used to develop the existing public
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 in
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 to save money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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