Some people believe that it is important for children to attend extra classes outside school, while others believe that they should be allowed to play after school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In some parts of the world,
children
are forced to go to cram schools
and other facilities of extracurricular learning, but many people believe that this
is unfair and that they should be allowed to enjoy their free time instead
. This
essay will look at both perspectives and then
conclude that it is indeed unfair.
In countries like South Korea, most children
are made to go to an array of cram schools
outside of regular school hours. Their parents do this
in order to give their child a better future because it helps the child to learn more and thus
gives them the academic advantages needed to apply to the best universities or jobs in future. These schools
often provide children
with an advantage over their peers because they improve their foreign language or math skills more quickly, and thus
the children
who do not attend these schools
might have comparatively poor grades.
However
, whilst this
attitude may result in better academic performance, it is certainly not good for the mental health of these children
. It is no coincidence that places like South Korea have the highest rates of suicide among their young populations. The fact is that children
are not equipped to spend fourteen or sixteen hours per day in classrooms, memorising facts and figures. In a sense, it is a form of child abuse. Children
should be allowed to go home and spend time with friends and family to build social skills. They should be allowed to occupy themselves in order to become more creative and learn how to understand their own mind instead
of being trained to repeat what they are told.
In conclusion, it is understandable that some parents want their children
to go to extra classes, but this
is damaging to children
and they should be given the freedom to play and socialise outside of regular school hours.Submitted by jason on
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