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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the

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The plans illustrate the current airport and how
this
 will be changed through redevelopment
next
 year. Overall, it is clear that the remodelling work markedly increased the size of the airport. It changed from 8
number of
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gates
 to a total 18
number of
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gates
, and the shape of the gate's entrance is separated into 3 passways.
Also
, on the corner of
arrivals
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the arrivals
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 sector, new car hire has appeared. Looking at the plans more closely, one can see that
instead
 of the walkway in the gate place, it was replaced with the sky train due to the expansion of
gates
.
In addition
, several facilities are built in the southwest airport.
For example
, shops are built between
gates
 and passport control. In front of security passport control in departure, the check-in was originally located replaced with bag drop and the check-in is moved to the right wall in front of the passport control. When it comes to the arrivals sector, there was nothing before, but new facilities are made. As I mentioned the extra layouts of car hire and on the left
side
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 there is an ATM machine and
cafe
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the cafe
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 is located on the right wall side.
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