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1. Crime rates will fall as advances in technology make it easier to detect and prevent crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is undeniable fact that the rapid technological innovations are a great boon to the society as they are helpful to solve numerous difficult problems & improve the quality & ease of living to a great extent. It is often thought that the
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 will hesitate when they are under electronic & human supervision. It is
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usual human behaviour to behave properly when someone is watching them closely. These days, with an increase in surveillance, robbers are afraid of getting caught and they refrain from entering the premises and committing the theft as they will be caught very easily. In the olden days, with no
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, burglars used to attack many houses during the nights & steal valuables. Sometimes, they do not even hesitate to kill the people and steal their possessions. With the government educating people about the importance of setting up
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, government officials are using high-tech technologies to find out the criminals within 24-48 hours. There are numerous instances where the thieves are caught within no time due to the
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. Some of them are using face detectors, satellite chips, metal & bomb detectors, fingerprint detectors and many more. With all
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 twice before harming anybody .
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 rates have reduced and will continue to fall in the coming days
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crime deterrent
  • high-tech surveillance
  • facial recognition systems
  • omnipresence
  • deter
  • digital forensics
  • ballistic testing
  • revolutionize
  • exonerate
  • root causes
  • social inequality
  • invasion of privacy
  • civil liberties
  • surveillance
  • data collection
  • negative implications
  • cybercrime
  • hacking
  • identity theft
  • online fraud
  • cybersecurity
  • vulnerabilities
  • exploit
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