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Most Modern Families have both parents working and as a result children spend less time with their parents What is the reason for this? What problems can this cause?

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With the everyday increasing prices of the basic daily commodities, increase in educational
fees
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, accommodation costs, and healthcare costs in many families both
parents
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 have to
work
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 just to meet the growing demands.
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 at times can harm
children
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, the reasons of which will be substantiated in
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 essay. Due to overpopulation, there is a growing demand for housing, which results in many families being charged exorbitant amounts for a basic one-bedroom apartment.
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, the growing costs of educating a child, their uniforms other school-related
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 is having both
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 take up
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 to meet these demands.
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, many colleges require huge amounts as 'donations'
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 to
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.
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, my cousin who is looking to study in Bangalore requires to pay a donation of INR. 300000/-,
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 to his monthly
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.
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 has forced both his
parents
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 to take up
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, with his father working a part-time job on the weekends just to meet
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 requirement.
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, the problem
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 can cause is that there will be a disconnect between a family, as the
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 are not available when the
children
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 come from school, and the
children
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 not being awake when the
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 come home from
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. Because of
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,
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 may seek solace in other means,
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 as continuous television watching, online gaming, and in the worst of cases involving themselves in unlawful activities. In conclusion,
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 is a problem every family faces it is something they should ask themselves. Whether working all day is important or is the all-round development of their child important.
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