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Some people believe that after hundred years life will be easier for most of people, while the others are unsure. What is your opinion?

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While some
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 believe that after a few centuries the
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 of
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 will have fewer struggles in comparison to
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 time, others argue that they are uncertain about the future. In my opinion, the growth in the fields of nanotechnology, and transportation is inevitable to make the
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 of
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 happy and comfortable over centuries.
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 with, advancements in the field of nanotechnology will surely make the
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 of
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 more accessible, and comfortable in the coming years.
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 is because
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 technology in the future holds the possibility to cure any
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-threatening disease, and
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, will increase the
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 expectancy, which in today’s world is not possible. Nano-techs are developing nano-robots that could be taken
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 to tablets, and they are designed to travel with the blood in veins if they encounter any foreign body that will initiate antigen, and an antibody reaction to curb the spread of disease. To illustrate, recently in a human trial nano-robots with a camera were given to the truck drivers to see how their metabolism works, while they are on the move, and the results were imminent.
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, an individual could be pre-diagnosed with the aid of
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 technology and
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, saving millions of dollars of
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, and that could be diverted to other projects
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, there would be a drastic decline in the travelling time because of the advent of superfast trains, and personal planes (similar to cars).
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,
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 would be able to travel hundreds of miles to and from work.
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, offering
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 the chance to pursue their field of interest, while balancing between work-
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.
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,
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 will be more content and happy with
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, which is hard for the
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 of today’s era to achieve. To conclude, I would like to say that with the current advancement speed in technology, our future holds great endeavours in the field of nanotechnology, and travelling, and thereby, improving the lives of
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 of the earth.

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