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SOME PEOPE THINK THAT SPENDING A LOT OF MONEY ON BIRTHDAYS AND MARRIAGES CELEBRATIONS IS A WASTE OF MONEY BUT OTHERS THINK THAT IT IS IMPORTANT TO THE YOUNG PEOPLE AND THE SOCIETY. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OPINION.

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Some people ponder throwing lavish
birthday
parties
 and marriages are a waste of money whereas there is another group that feels that it is crucial to
youngsters
 and the community. People should be able to afford super-rich weddings and
birthday
parties
, the financial status of the person plays
a
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 important role. Whereas it can be important to
youngsters
 as peers or friends might respect you based on the type of celebration you throw. The financial status of a person is deciding factor on the type of
parties
 that you can have.
For example
, a student who just graduated and looking for a job, might not be able to throw a luxuries party as he might have debts or education loans that he would need to pay off. So
such
 people might think that spending more on
birthday
parties
 are not important as they a debt on them which takes the priority.
On the other hand
,
birthday
 dinners are important to
youngsters
 as it kind of creates the image of you in the mind of your associate and friends.
For example
, if you are a newcomer in a high school or if you are a fresher in your job, the type of party that you throw allows your friends or your associate at work to know more about you. The
first
 impression you create on others especially when you are the new kid in the school, or a fresher in the neighbourhood stays on forever, so it is important for
youngsters
 to spend more to celebrate these special occasions. In conclusion, the financial status is the major factor in how the person sees whether it is required to spend more money to celebrate
this
 special occasion or not, whereas on the other ,hand it is important for
youngsters
 to invest money to throw
luxury
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 celebration for special occasions as it helps them to earn respect among their associate and colleagues.
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