Some people believe that the internet has brought people closer together by making the world smaller. Others disagree, claiming that the internet has made people and communities more isolated because they no longer need to leave home and interact with others. Discuss both the view and give your opinion.

Since the advent of
internet
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, our life has changed in every aspect. While some claim that the
internet
has minimized our need for socializing and reduced our engagement with people, I believe that the
internet
has shrunk the world and
this
has eased our life in many aspects.
This
essay will discuss both perspectives. On one hand, thanks to the
internet
, we are able to do many things we could not do 4 decades ago. Today, we are able to access any information whenever we want and wherever we are.
In other words
, no matter where we are we can acquire any information we need. To give an example, a couple of years ago, On my holiday in Berlin, I got lost and I was looking for a decent hotel with a reasonable price. It was midnight and the only source was my mobile phone with an
internet
connection. After checking the comments of others, I managed to spend the night staying in a comfortable hotel.
On the other hand
, the reliance on the
internet
has reduced human
interaction
. Texting and instant messages
has
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converted many people into
introvert
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beings. The more dependence on the
internet
, the less we interact with others. To illustrate,
although
online banking has eased our life in many aspects, we do not need the hospitality of the people working at banks.
Besides
, online education has diminished the
interaction
of tutors and pupils. Whenever students have a question, they prefer to write an email to their teachers. It can be obviously seen that online activities have reduced the necessity of human
interaction
. All in all,
Although
the
internet
and the dependence on online activities have reduced the necessity of human
interaction
, as a social
entity
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we are still in search
for
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human engagement. I believe that using the
internet
consciously would mitigate its negative effects.
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