some people think money is the best gift to youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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giving

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gift

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is a part of individual tradition until now but

mostly

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people

having a dilemma of choosing

present

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especially to the teenagers despite

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others claiming cash is the best.

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essay will discuss both sides as well as my opinion if I will give

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best gifts to youngsters

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will offer something

that is

more useful and memorable one.

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this

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people

nowadays finding difficulties in choosing the

gift

to offer because young

people

nowadays are having

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of choices in life. Even though,

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will still choose to have a

gift

that is

something convenient to them

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For example

, my sister was celebrated her debut

last

year and

then

her phone was broken at that time, so

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I did

instead

of giving her money I sent her a brand new phone as a birthday

presents

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and I’m glad that she likes it. So, money is not the

prescious

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precious

gift

of all. In contrary to

this

, others said that its better if the money to be given.

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depends upon the situation because some

people

are busy and they do not have time

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for

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gift

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, they will give

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cash as a present because

its

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hassle free

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but most of the time now parents are like that. There is a chance that if you give hard cash to the young

people

or to your children there is a possibility they will spend it

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the wrong way.

As a result

, they will ask more and they do not understand what’s the value of it. To recapitulate, despite

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people

saying monetary is

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greatest thing.

Still

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I believe the finest

gift

you can give those worth remembering and for

lifetime

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valuable

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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some people think money is the best gift to youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

You recently attented a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home you found you had left some vital papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager or the hotel. -Explain the problem. -Say why the documents are vital . - Suggest a solution.

Many people believe that social networking sites have had a huge negative atibe impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree.

Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have a little effect on public health, and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.