some people think money is the best gift to youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

As we all know
giving
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gift
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is a part of individual tradition until now but
mostly
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people
having a dilemma of choosing
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especially to the teenagers despite
of
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others claiming cash is the best.
This
essay will discuss both sides as well as my opinion if I will give
a
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best gifts to youngsters
i
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will offer something
that is
more useful and memorable one.
To begin
this
,
mostly
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people
nowadays finding difficulties in choosing the
gift
to offer because young
people
nowadays are having
number
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of choices in life. Even though,
i
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will still choose to have a
gift
that is
something convenient to them
everyday
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.
For example
, my sister was celebrated her debut
last
year and
then
her phone was broken at that time, so
what
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I did
instead
of giving her money I sent her a brand new phone as a birthday
presents
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and I’m glad that she likes it. So, money is not the
prescious
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precious
gift
of all. In contrary to
this
, others said that its better if the money to be given.
This
cases
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it
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depends upon the situation because some
people
are busy and they do not have time
looking
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for
the
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gift
.
For instance
, they will give
a
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cash as a present because
its
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a
hassle free
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but most of the time now parents are like that. There is a chance that if you give hard cash to the young
people
or to your children there is a possibility they will spend it
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the wrong way.
As a result
, they will ask more and they do not understand what’s the value of it. To recapitulate, despite
of
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people
saying monetary is
a
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greatest thing.
Still
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I believe the finest
gift
you can give those worth remembering and for
lifetime
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a lifetime
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valuable
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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