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describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having leisure time

#leisure #time #disavantages
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All humans like to have some free
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 to enjoy the things they want.
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, I love to enjoy my
leisure
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time
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 by listening to my favourite kinds of music and, I
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 spend some quality
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 reading my favourite authors books.
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 draft will discuss the merits and demerits of having
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, the main advantages of having
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activities
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 are, the
people
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 can enjoy stress-free moments in their life. Because of that, they can be free from psychological distress and
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 some physical diseases like Hypertension and Arthritis.
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, planning a trip with family members will help them to increase their bond with each other. To summarize, all in all, planning and doing some
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activities
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 not only helping the person alone but
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 assists the families happiness too.
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, by involving more in
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activities
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 alone make humans lazy.
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, some
people
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 live their life without doing any proper job.
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, these kinds of
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 depend on their parents for food and clothes. They will only think about their bliss and one or another way they will become a burden to their family.
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, some
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 find pleasure in taking a long journey in bikes or cars and
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 offer more tension to their family members.
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, like any other thing,
leisure
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activities
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 has both pros and cons. So, limiting the
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 and
activities
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 to an extent can overcome all the cons and
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this
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 will help the
people
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 to enjoy the quality period in a good manner.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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