in recent years, the family structure has changed, as well as family roles. What are the changes occuring? Do you think these changes are positive or negative ?

Family is a mixture of emotions and blood relations.
Every one
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has a mental and physical bond with respect to their family.Over the recent
years
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the structure has changed.A lot of families have evolved depending upon the count of the
people
in that family like nuclear family,extended family etc.The changes that are brought by changing of
compsition
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composition
of the family and their negative impacts will be discussed in
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essay. In the olden
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each family is a joint one.All the blood relations
stays
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together in the same house and stick to each other in good and bad times.It was possible for them to stay in the same house as all the
people
in the house does the same occupation .
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in the
past
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there are households where all of them does farming .Mostly we find
such
cultures in villages.In the
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there were only
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towns
. Due to modernisation all the
people
are fascinated to the numerous facilities in the
towns
and
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migrating to them.Farmers in the villages thought that farming is less profitable as it depends upon
the
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nature but not on
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human effort.So they thought of getting paid consistently by moving to
towns
than getting irregular income from farming.
Thus
they leave their family behind.When they move to
towns
they get busy
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their tough schedule and
dont
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don't
find time to meet the family they left behind. As various family compositions are formed it
decreses
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decreases
the bond between them and they cant help each other.During the Corona pandemic
people
in the
towns
cant help their parents in the village if they are affected by the deadly virus as there was a
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lock down
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imposed.It must have been tough on them.
People
are forgetting the strength of the bonds as they are not together and are
beecoming
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becoming
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and care only about themselves.They never really give a thought about
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their family is doing .They get too busy to look after their family , listen to them and spend time with them.
This
is weakening their relationship. To conclude, persons in a family are gradually getting disconnected from each other due to various issues.No matter what
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situation is,where ever they are present ,they must care about
about
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each other to lead a happy life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Family structure
  • Modern family
  • Extended family
  • Nuclear family
  • Same-sex parent families
  • Breadwinner
  • Caregiving responsibilities
  • Family dynamics
  • Globalization
  • Economic shifts
  • Migration
  • Child-free lifestyles
  • Cohabitation
  • Traditional marriage
  • Perceptions
  • Homemaker
  • Communication
  • Shared activities
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