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Money can buy many things, but can it buy happiness? Do you agree that rich people are generally happier than poor people?

#money #happiness #people
Nowadays the whole world is racing to raise a
lot
 of
money
 to get excited, but many
people
 argue that
this
 is not reasonable. I agree with
this
 statement because not all
things
 in
this
 world can be bought with
money
, particularly happiness. In
this
 essay, I will explain my opinion that
people
 who have a
lot
 of
money
 are not automatically happier than
people
 who do not have a
lot
 of
money
. As it is well known that human needs
money
,
this
 is inevitable. They need
money
 to meet basic demands
such
 as food, clothes, and shelter. After being able to fulfil those
things
,
people
 tend to achieve their desires
such
 as luxurious vehicles or homes. Generally, humans are living
things
 that find it difficult to have a level of satisfaction with
money
, so that humans tend to look after more and more.
However
, some
people
 who have a
lot
 of
money
 can still suffer depression, loneliness, and severe mental illness. Not a few public figures who have a
lot
 of
money
 and success story never feel real joy,
instead
 use sedatives, alcohol, and drugs excessively, and even several choose to end their lives.
In contrast
, it is obvious that many
people
 do not have much
money
 but do not face misery, solitude, or suicidal thoughts.
Besides
,
people
 who have a
lot
 of
money
also
 sometimes have unnecessary fears because they tend to be frightened by the loss of prosperity and abundance that have been owned while
people
 who do not have much
money
 will be more grateful for what they have,
thus
 tend to be happier. To conclude,
money
 is not the key to finding true happiness,
although
 how to be grateful for what you have, both in minor and major
things
.
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