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Money can buy many things, but can it buy happiness? Do you agree that rich people are generally happier than poor people?

#money #happiness #people
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Nowadays the whole world is racing to raise a
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 of
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 to get excited, but many
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 argue that
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 is not reasonable. I agree with
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 statement because not all
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 in
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 world can be bought with
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, particularly happiness. In
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 essay, I will explain my opinion that
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 who have a
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 of
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 are not automatically happier than
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 who do not have a
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 of
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. As it is well known that human needs
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,
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 is inevitable. They need
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 to meet basic demands
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 as food, clothes, and shelter. After being able to fulfil those
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,
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 tend to achieve their desires
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 as luxurious vehicles or homes. Generally, humans are living
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 that find it difficult to have a level of satisfaction with
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, so that humans tend to look after more and more.
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, some
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 who have a
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 of
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 can still suffer depression, loneliness, and severe mental illness. Not a few public figures who have a
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 of
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 and success story never feel real joy,
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 use sedatives, alcohol, and drugs excessively, and even several choose to end their lives.
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, it is obvious that many
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 do not have much
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 but do not face misery, solitude, or suicidal thoughts.
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,
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 who have a
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 of
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 sometimes have unnecessary fears because they tend to be frightened by the loss of prosperity and abundance that have been owned while
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 who do not have much
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 will be more grateful for what they have,
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 tend to be happier. To conclude,
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 is not the key to finding true happiness,
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 how to be grateful for what you have, both in minor and major
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.
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