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In many cities, there is a lack of space to develop and as a result, in order to modernize, old buildings are demolished and replaced with new buildings. What are the disadvantages of knocking down old buildings? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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With cities becoming overpopulated with the rising number of inhabitants, there is a greater need for more space, to accommodate the greater influx of
people
.
This
 results in the destruction of older
buildings
 to give way to new
buildings
.
This
 has disadvantages which will be explained in
this
 essay. On one hand, destroying older
buildings
 is like removing a piece of history from a city.
For example
, The Cecil Hotel in Los Angeles is a hotel steeped in mystery, as it the sight of numerous unexplained deaths, the most recent of which being in 2013. Now, whats makes
this
 an attraction, is the fact that no one knows how these
people
 died, which again adds to the mystery. Because of
this
 fact,
this
 hotel has become an attraction for conspiracy theorists and normal onlookers.
Although
this
 building attracts
people
 for the wrong reason, it now acts as a tourism attraction, which generates revenue for the city.
Secondly
, destroying the older
buildings
 is labour intrusive.
This
 means, that the planning and construction of a new building will cost millions of taxpayer dollars, which eats into the cities budget.
On the other hand
, there are some pros to removing a dilapidated building. One of which is safety.
Although
people
 may argue that it would just be cheaper to renovate a building, the safety and integrity of the structure must be checked
first
. More often than not, the structure is deemed unworthy, thereby resulting in it being torn down.
Furthermore
, a new building will provide a new landscape to the city, and will
also
 allow room to improve the facilities of the building. In conclusion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, and
therefore
 it is always better to build a new building from the ground up.
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