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Some people think that a life is good for people as it is while others believe that constant change can be too demanding on people. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The one thing in
life
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that is
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 constant is change.
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, some sections of society prefer to have a constant
life
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, whilst others believe
life
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 should have constant change. We discuss, both sides of
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 coin in
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 essay.
First
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 and foremost, the people who prefer a constant
life
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, are those who want to feel like they are in control. They like to follow a schedule, and they do not like unwanted surprises.
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, My friend in Cochin is currently working as an Assistant Manager for a corporate Company. On one hand, he has got a steady white-collar
job
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, steady working hours, and
pay check
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, but
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, he dislikes his
job
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. Now the problem that arises, is that whilst he has got the opportunity to work in an area he loves, he is unable to give up the stability that comes with his current
job
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 which he strongly dislikes.
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, some people prefer to strive and reach the best possible position that they can. If that means that they need, to play on their strengths and improve on their weaknesses, which will ensure that they always are competing at the highest level. These people will always be rewarded because they are constantly evolving themselves to meet the current
job
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 markets, so they will always be ahead of other applicants. In conclusion, I believe that
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 a secure steady, and stress-free
life
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 is good, it is always better to advance yourself to meet the current demands of the
job
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 market.
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