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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Exploration is a good way to enhance knowledge, few nations advocating
this
 trend after completion of school exams,
although
 the merits are outweighing the demerits, in my
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 it’s better to have a gap year for work or outing, in
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 possible when we move out of bounds, it’s very important to explore different things and parts so that they can decide easily about their future,
however
 it
necessary
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 because nowadays everything changing at
high
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 pace,
for instance
, if a person wants to study outside their country for
professional
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 course they should visit that place so that they will friendly with all
such
 as, nature, climate, language and community,
Moreover
, its excellent utilisation of their leisure time. I totally reckon
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Furthermore
,
other youngster
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 who do not want to skip their study they prefer continuity without break between their studies, while it will give them only college environment addition to that they can be ahead by one year at university, but ultimately, they
also
 require
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 after completion and it sometimes deter their practical skills, even though they leg in co-operation with
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 environment it may
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 to change fields, change streams and many other issues.
Consequently
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 important to withdraw themselves for a year for exposer. In capsulation, taking
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 from study for jobs and experience or to visit new places is an effective strategy of the nations, in my
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 it has supremacy over its drawbacks, in
future
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 it should be good to implement it
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 because
this
 will minimize the public fear and enhance the overall personality.
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  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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