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many people these days change careers throughout their working life.What are the main reasons for it? Do you think that it is good for the society as a whole?

It is quite alarming that
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 switch their jobs at least four times before they reach the age of 30. Despite the fact that a dealy in promotion and dissatisfaction at the workplace is responsible for that, I believe that
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people
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 will be working at the
right
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 job places. Job dissatisfaction and late promotions are the most prominent reasons for switching careers among
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. In
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 regard, even though employees are working hard, managers show reluctance to get them higher positions due to personal reasons.
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, many jobs
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 to seek alternative options to earn.
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, In Australia, the labour market is full of educated professionals who left their previous
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 because of higher stress and lower reward. So,
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 may not leave their workplaces if they are rewarded positively.  Switching careers can have a positive impact on society as
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 will be working in the
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 places. The reason is that
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 will be frustrated if they force themselves to
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 at a non-rewarding place.
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, a singer may not be a good manager even though he is working hard. So, he always tries to find
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 in a music studio in order to pursue his career.
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, every person has a different
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, so changing
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 is not a bad idea until it is satisfying you as well as giving up your place for a more deserving worker. In conclusion, we examined why
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 are changing their careers due to delays in reaching management positions and unhappiness with their
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, as well as how 
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 at the
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 companies can positively help their society. So, I think that it would be good for employers as well if they have the
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people
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 working for them.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career mobility
  • lifelong learning
  • job satisfaction
  • economic factors
  • market dynamics
  • redundancy
  • work-life balance
  • skill set
  • adaptation
  • innovation
  • personal growth
  • vocational evolution
  • technological advancements
  • workforce diversification
  • expertise development
  • professional transition
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