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Some people believe that old buildings should be replaced with more modern ones. Other people argue that we should protect old buildings because they have a special value. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A handful
people
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 consider
that old constructions
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that old construction
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 need to be replaced by modern
buildings
.
However
, there are some individuals who believe that ancient
buildings
 must be saved as they have some historical value.
This
 essay will highlight the thought to replace old
constactions
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constructions
construction
 with new ones and another opinion about protecting old
buildings
.
First
 of all, most of the
buildings
, which were built more than 70 years ago, are costly for living and not comfortable. It means that it is very expensive to maintain old constructions as electricity and water pipe systems need to be replaced. In my opinion, new highscrapes with
latest
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 network systems are more comfortable for
residencial
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residential
 or business
purpose
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purposes
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.
Classic
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A classic
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 example is Dubai, where most
of
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people
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the people
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 prefer living in modern apartments with high-speed elevators, panoramic windows and
latest
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 architectural innovations.
On the other hand
,
people
 should carefully consider that some ancient
constuctions
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constructions
 have architectural and historical value for cities.
In other words
, some
buildings
 have artworks which were designed
hundreds
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 years ago;
therefore
, a lot of tourists can be interested to see them.
For example
, these constructions can be used as museums, so citizens can safe architectural artworks for their offsprings and
brings
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 tourist to their countries. In conclusion,
people
 need to find a balance between new and old
buildings
.
Although
,
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 most old
contructions
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constructions
 do not suit for livings as they are costly and not comfortable, some of
historical
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the historical
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 contractions can be used for museums. Meanwhile, I believe that for residence
purpose
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purposes
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people
 should build new modern structures.
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