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Some people think it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 fast-paced world, it is common that
traffic
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 networks have become increasingly less efficient due to the explosion of population. Some
people
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 believe that it is crucial to allocate the funds for
development
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 of
roads
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 and motorways rather than enhancing public
transport
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systems
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.
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why it is entirely necessary to spend
money
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 on
roads
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 and motorways despite
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the buses, trains, or other public
transport
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systems
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.
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, some
people
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also
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 believe in spending chunks of
money
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 on the mode of
transport
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 is more appropriate, as it provides comfortable and safe journey. Expensive interiors, advanced security
systems
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 and good maintenance in the public mode of transports inclined many
people
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 to use them as their daily mode of
transport
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. Indeed, it is known that usage of Volvo’s and Metro trains
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 increased significantly as it makes
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travelling much easier and enjoyable. These are the few reasons that have encouraged
people
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 to believe in spending
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money
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 on the public
transport
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systems
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.
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, despite
of
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all the merits it is much essential to
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 contribute to
construction
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 and maintenance of the
roads
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 and expressways.
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transport
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 system can only be a success if there are good
roads
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. Spending
money
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 on the
roads
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 and motorways will not only alleviate
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road accidents but
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 help in controlling the
traffic
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. It is recorded that almost 45% of accidents occur due to bad road conditions
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 big potholes and uneven road surfaces.
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, many
people
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 are unable to reach their destination on time due to the
traffic
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 congestion caused by the poor condition of
roads
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.
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, it entirely justifies the beliefs of many
people
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 to spend
money
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 on the development of
roads
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. In conclusion,
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 essay completely agrees to allocate funds to create multiple lane
roads
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 as it will not only bear the fast
traffic
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 and will
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 save
people
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’s time and energy.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Infrastructure
  • Transportation
  • Congestion
  • Economy
  • Carbon emissions
  • Pollution
  • Social inclusion
  • Urban development
  • Efficient
  • Investment
  • Reliance
  • Boosting
  • Affordable
  • Private vehicle users
  • Public transport system
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