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The number of advertisements for charities on television and the Internet seems to be increasing. What is causing this? Is this a positive or negative development?

#advertisements #charities #television #internet #development
The advancements in technology
has
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 a deep impact on
lives
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the lives
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 of people.It led to various departments and has benefitted
masses
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the masses
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 in
number
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a number
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 of ways.Even the philanthropy group has joined
this
 sector .I think
this
 is a positive development. Let up have a glance at the reasons behind the increasing
number
 of advertisements for charities on television and
internet
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the internet
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.
To begin
 with, nowadays,
internet
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 has become a means to know everything regardless of the field.Folks can know everything just by their fingerprint.
Secondly
 ,it has the ability to spread news just like
forest
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 fire.
For example
,
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fundraising
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fund raising
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fundraising
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 news,news related to natural calamities booms all over the world.
Likewise
,more and more individuals
wants
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 to help
who
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those who
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 are in need in areas
such
 as extreme poverty,lack of education and many more.
Moreover
,the living standards of people
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 improving which makes them able to donate things
which
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that
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 are needed .
In addition
 ,a large chunk of society is unaware
about
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 the usage of
internet
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the internet
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.some
individual
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individuals
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 are familiar
about
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 exactly where money should be donated due to which a large
number
 of ads are shown on
internet
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the internet
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. To sum up, technology has paved
a
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 way
to
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for
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 philanthropy groups
which
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that
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 are desiring to help others in a
number
 of ways.The trend of advertisements has helped thousands of needy people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nonprofit organization
  • crowdfunding
  • philanthropy
  • altruism
  • donor fatigue
  • corporate social responsibility
  • social media influence
  • charitable giving
  • sponsorship
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • awareness campaign
  • digital marketing
  • emotional appeal
  • fundraising
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