As countries develop, more and more people buy and use their cars. Do you think the advantages of this trend for individuals outweigh its disadvantage for environment?

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public frequently use cars

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of public transport. While

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facility improve the condition of life as well as less

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. On the other side, it

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have

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a negative impact on

environment

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forthcoming passage, I will explain some benefits and drawbacks of using four-wheels.

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with, in the economically stable countries folks are now

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car, it indicates that

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the standard of living is improved. It is giving more freedom, people can go anywhere with no time and

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granting mobility and independence to travel. Now, a person can go

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shopping or

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kind of work with he/ her flexible schedule.

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, travelling by car makes journey enjoyable and vibrant as well as

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and

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low time.

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weeks ago one of my

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went

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family

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trip, he mentioned that

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it took only 5 hours to reach compare to public transports.

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, they stay

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and

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enjoyed their vacation fruitfully without getting

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.

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, we cannot deny that

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truth traffic congestion

are

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rising due to use of cars.

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of that, those vehicles are running by petrol, diesel which emission toxin gas. For that reason, the quality of air and climate

were

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damaging

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alarming

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rate.

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, the world environment research centre reported that

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the

uses

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of personal cars is higher which

are

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reason

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of

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environment

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environmental

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pollution. To conclude, the advantages of personal transport are many rather than its disadvantages. We just need to

carefully

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how can we less damage our planet.